Story:
There
once was an older man who had been homeless for a long time and went by the name
of John. He did not have a steady job and so he would wait and ask all of the
people walking on the sidewalks near downtown. He was always there and somehow
he always provided just enough food for him and his wife. One day he had enough
of struggling day to day and so he decided to go to the Trump tower to see if
there was any way that he would help him. When he got there Trump and his assistants
were talking about a haunted house that was on the outskirts of town. It was
known to be the most haunted place in the country and Trump wanted to see who
could do it and make it out alive. John spoke up and said he was up for the
challenge. Trump told him if he decided to do that he would not only give the
man a skyscraper with a penthouse, but he would also give him one of his five
star restaurants to profit from.
That
following night John started his journey to the house, despite the fact that
his wife begged him not to. He made the hour long walk and was ready for the
task at hand. When he first saw the house he started to shake and show his
fear. All of a sudden someone appeared next to him and asked what was wrong. He
told him about the bet and how poor he had been and how this would change his
life. The man told him to follow him and he will keep him safe. They walked up
the steps and entered the house. As soon as the door shut behind him the ghosts
started making their way to him. The man stopped in front of the ghosts and
told them that they were to keep him safe because he was a friend. They did as
he said and the man walked back to Trumps tower that next morning.
When
he got to the tower Trump followed through with his commitment and granted him
his new house and business. The man was so pleased and grateful that he invited
all the poor people to come and eat for free in this restaurant. The man who
helped him came and was present but shortly slipped away after telling John he
had done what he came to do. It was a
great celebration and John and his wife lived happily ever after, never seeing the
man again.
Bibliography:
Bengal: The Story of a Brahmadaitya
Authors note:
This started out as an old time ghost story
that took place in a village with a king. The man still completed his task of
going to the haunted tree and was granted a farm with lots of crops. The ghosts
also helped him farm his land when he was in need. I thought adding a recent time
period to this story would help draw the reader in and help them connect more.
Hi Ace! Nice story! I really liked how you moved it to modern times! You made it fit well. I kind of wish that the friendly stranger and John had become good friends afterwards though, instead of never seeing other again. I also wonder who this man is? My favorite part is how the ghosts actually kept him safe in the haunted house.
ReplyDeleteHi Ace, I really enjoyed this story and the way that you put such a modern spin onto it. I never would have thought to take that approach. I think a little bit more character development would enhance this piece even more, but I also like it as is. I can't wait to read more of your stories in the coming weeks of this course.
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you made this story applicable to modern time. I also can see this actually happening with all of the craziness I've seen since this election! I really would love to know who the man that protected him is and why he chose to do so. In my mind, I picture him being a man that came from similar hardships or maybe even the ghost of a man whose life was taken too soon due to similar hardships.
Overall, great story! Thanks for sharing!
Hi Ace! I like that you decided to change the setting to a more modern time instead of keeping it in the original village with a king. Is the man who helped John also a ghost so that’s why he never saw him again? Maybe if you add in details about what the haunted house was like, it would show how much bravery it took for John to come out alive.
ReplyDeleteHi Ace! I really liked how you took on a more "modern" storytelling technique. I really like using that technique a lot in my writing, so when other people use it I like to see how I could improve on it myself. I think if we got a little more background information regarding the characters, this would make the story stronger! Either way, you did a really good job! Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteHello Ace. I know this is an older story but I had commented on "The Decision" on your comment wall. I love the modern approach you took. I try to do the same with most of my stories. You did make it kind of easy to get the Trump in this story. I would have made the man had to go through a headache of a process to get to him. That would have added a different dynamic to the story.
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